This chapter seems to be almost all dialogue. I hope that's ok. One problem with taking a chapter at a time to the writing group is that it chops up the flow of the whole story a bit. I just re-read chapters 11-13 all together though, and the conversation doesn't seem out of place.
Here's an excerpt:
Tracy’s tone changed. “I like you, Ana. I think you fit in well, here in Cherry Hill, but you can’t rock the boat. Small towns have long memories. Take care of yourself. "
See Chapter 12 of News from Dead Mule Swamp
There is no length requirement on entries to Weekend Writers Retreat. Excerpts are fine. I'd love to have you join in.
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